My phone buzzed. “Annabelle, I’m here”
“Coming!” I responded.
I threw on a pair of dark jeans and my new pink shirt. Tonight was friday night and, as usual, my best friend Madison and I were going out. Dylan, another senior at Pineview High School, was throwing a party. Dylan’s parties were known for being full of good music and good times, the September weather was perfect, and I had a window perfect for sneaking out of. Nothing could go wrong tonight.
I grabbed my bag and hopped out the window. Madison was waiting in her black Honda Civic (a gift from her parents on her 16th birthday). I hopped in, and we quietly drove out of my neighborhood, and into this night of possibility.
When we got to Dylan’s house, there were already so many cars that we had to park a few blocks away and walk. We walked inside and were greeted by a sea of people, and house-shaking music. Obviously this party had been well advertised. I looked at Madison and said (more accurately screamed) “help me find Charlie.” Charlie was my boyfriend of almost two years. We had met in math class sophomore year, and bonded over our love of Sufjan Stevens, our hatred of whipped cream, and the fact that we both played soccer.
Madison and I pushed our way through the sea of people, half of whom didn’t even look like they were in high school, in an attempt to find Charlie. We finally found him by the pool in the backyard, talking to some of his friends from soccer. We made eye contact. “Annabelle!” he shouted, and ran toward me. His blonde hair bounced as he ran, which I thought was absolutely adorable. He gave me a kiss, and then said “hi” to Madison, but Madison had just located her good friend (and secret crush) Jeff. I nudged her, and said “go see him!”
Charlie and I left Madison and headed inside to get some drinks. We pushed our way into the house and through the crowd, until we finally made it to the kitchen. We decided to go upstairs and see what was happening up there. We again went through the process of pushing through this sea of people, and up the stairs. I saw Kerry and John, a couple known for their rocky three-year-long relationship fighting on the stairs, so I grabbed Charlie’s hand to make sure I wouldn’t lose him. We made it up the stairs and into Dylan’s game room, which was, like the rest of the house, packed. There was different music playing in this room, and flashing lights; this was the dance room. All of a sudden I started to feel really claustrophobic, the sweaty bodies bumping into me made me feel dirty and light-headed.
“I need air,” I told Charlie. He took my hand and lead my into the bathroom, and shut the door.
“What’s wrong?” He asked. I didn’t even get a chance to answer before we heard a loud bump on the door. I jumped, and he protectively put his arms around me. Nothing else happened, other than the continuous din of the music and movement outside. “Nothing, I just would rather spend some time with you than this crowd of people I don’t know,” I told him.
We sat on the floor facing each other, and let ourselves wind down from the stimulation of this party. “Hey look, a 17 Magazine!” I pulled the magazine out from the stack of papers in this bathroom. “Let’s do some of the quizzes!” Charlie laughed but agreed. “Okay, should we do “Are You Flirtatious or Shy?” or should we do “Which Lipstick Fits Your Personality?”
Suddenly, the music shut off, and was replaced with “FIRE!!!!!!!!!” “GET OUT OF THE HOUSE!” “GO GO GO!!!” Simultaneously, the smell of burning reached me.
“We need to get out of here!” Charlie said, and stood up. He reached for the doorknob, and turned, and pushed, but the door wouldn’t open more than a few centimeters. He tried again. No movement. “Something is in front of the door,” we said at the same time. I tried to help him push, and we kept pushing the door and screaming for help and trying to open the door and trying to get someone to help us, and it finally dawned on us that there were no longer any voices outside the door. Everyone else had left.
We were trapped.
It’s crazy how quickly everything seemed to be happening. There was a visible level of smoke in the bathroom now, so the fire must have been big and been close to our part of the house. “What do we do?!?” I asked Charlie. The look on his face told me he had run out of ideas. We couldn’t break down the door, there were no windows, and we really were trapped. Smoke poured into the room like liquid.
“I love you, Annabelle,” Charlie whispered. I tried to respond, but the smoke caught in my throat and I just ended up coughing. We sat down on the floor together, finally accepting that we could do nothing but hope and wait for help. Charlie took off his shirt and we wet it and put it over our faces, hopefully to block out the smoke.
“I love you, Charlie. We’re gonna be okay. It’s gonna be okay. I love you.” I was so, so, tired. “I’m just gonna take a little nap, okay? Wake me up when the fire is gone. I love you” I mumbled the last words, knowing that I needed more than anything to get them out there, but I was so tired and it was so hard to breathe. My eyelids closed, and I felt Charlie next to me, and I drifted off.
1. What is the main subject and main theme of this story?
ReplyDeleteThe main character is Annabelle, a girl who sneaks out at night to attend a high school party. The story follows Annabelle and her boyfriend Charlie, who find themselves in an unfortunate situation. Throughout the story we see the love between Annabelle and Charlie, that stays strong even in the face of danger.
2.Summarize the story in one word. Bittersweet
3. List one key word and one key phrase you
remember about this story.
Word-FIRE!!
Phrase-"We had met in math class sophomore year, and bonded over our love of Sufjan Stevens, our hatred of whipped cream, and the fact that we both played soccer."
4. What is your favorite part of this piece?
My favorite part of this was the end. It's moving. The two of them are facing death, but remain calm and focus on their love for one another. I could feel the devotion they had for one another at that part. It was written well.
5. Use a simile or metaphor to describe this piece:
“This piece is a ____tragic love story___ because ___is's heartbreaking____.”
6. What area would you like to see the author focus on more?
I would suggest more focus on the grammatical aspects of it (paragraphs, sentence structure, etc). The story is great, I really enjoyed it.
1. What is the main subject and main theme of this story? The main subject is Annabelle, a girl who manages to go into a popular High school party also to see her boyfriend, Charlie. Suddenly a fire worries everyone and leave the couple in trap.
ReplyDelete2.Summarize the story in one word. Romantic!
3. List one key word and one key phrase you remember about this story. “What do we do?!?” I asked Charlie. The look on his face told me he had run out of ideas.
4. What is your favorite part of this piece? The faith in the girl.
6. What area would you like to see the author focus on more? I would like to know how does it end and if someone died.